Re: Proposition for the Announce (second draft).

[Matt & Kim <patawi@polarcom.com>]

just typo type corrections Jean:

>developped not for profit by a small group of volunteers.  Not for

should be "developed"

>-We asked ourselves how to help a Linuxc beginner and tried to solve

you have an an extra letter in "Linux"

>postcript vieweers whose output is bad enough to make it nearly

vieweers = viewers

>In our case it means the Independence user ever knows how to get out
>of trouble at boot time.

Might be better said: "...the Independence user _always_ knows how..."

>-Both KDE, fonts or font servers (we ship a True Type font server) and
>special widgets like neXtaW can be installed transparently to the
>user.  Just restart X and they will be there.  Uninstall them, restart
>X and they will be gone.  The mechanism is clean and doesn't incur the
>dangers of automatic editing.

I don't understand the first portion of the first sentence. Do you mean:

"For both KDE and fonts or font servers..." ?
"Both font servers and widgets like neXtaW can be..." ?
"In KDE, both font servers and widgets ..." ?


>impressive for everyone.  We tried to include software for artistic
>creation be it for graphics (Blender, Moonlight, POV, GIMP 1.0.2) or
>sound.  Of course we added some games.

Since you listed some of the graphics apps it might be a good idea to list
some of the sound apps and games too.

>-Too many Linux users have to reboot Windows because their software
>for real life runs on the wrong operating system.  Be it for using a
>WYSYWYG word processor, managing a check book or a butterfly
>collection we provided stuff for doing it under Linux, and tin order o
>still reduce the time under Windows we included Wine.

Love this paragraph, probably because it's talking about me. :) 
Second last line: "... under Linux, and _in_ order _to_ still reduce..."


>-The installation is the same than the one from the base distribution.
>That means dial-up users don't get the same assistance than LAN users.

...assistance _as_ LAN users.

cheers,

-matt